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I'd go barrage- mortar (to me at least) suggests something different...
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Mortar Corvette?
I'd only use motar in the name if the ship were equipped with a motar-like weapon.

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Also, text like "EMP Emmiter Turret". Is the turret part really necessary here, or would removing it make it ambiguous? The same with "6 Artillery Cannon Turrets". The name of the weapon seems too short to append "Turret" to it - or maybe I'm just babbling again Mr. Green
If they are turrets then the word ought to be included I think as a turret is better than a fixed weapon.
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Okay great. Keep it like it is, then. To take it from staples, "That was easy." Wink (wait...I assume staples isn't in your countries. US and Canada only. *Wikipedia*...yep, only here. Mr. Green)
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Staples is in the UK... but maybe its something different Razz
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You know I was just looking at the Shuttle ("Support Cruiser" wait for that day for the rename) and the Fast Tracking Turrets name is weird, "AM Fast Tracking Field", I'm not understand the FIELD part? Shouldn't that be just TURRET? Both name and description. Very Happy
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ou know I was just looking at the Shuttle ("Support Cruiser" wait for that day for the rename) and the Fast Tracking Turrets name is weird, "AM Fast Tracking Field", I'm not understand the FIELD part? Shouldn't that be just TURRET? Both name and description.
I can understand why it has a field descriptor. But you're right, Fast Tracking Turret is a better name for it (and also a reference to the technology you research for Multi-Gun Corvettes in HW1.)
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I noticed this as well as I was reviewing the game text; however, it COULD be referring to it projecting a "field" of defense where ordinance is targeted and destroyed.

Also, AM Fast Tracking Field refers to Anti-Missile Fast Tracking Field; yet in the description it says anti-torpedo, does it not? However, this may only be in the corrections that you made, Sagyxil; I went through ALL the subsystems (a lot of time Wink ) manually without the auto-replace function of Notepad++, searching for issues. I fixed a lot of discrepencies; I'm uploading my changes now (I also used the ';' over the ',' as we worked out).

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Its name ought to be descriptive of what it does: "AM Fast Tracking Turret" OR "AM Fast Tracking System" OR "AM Fast Tracking Weapon"
The term 'field' could be used in its description if necessary.

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AM fast tracking system
Provides a field of defensive anti-missile and anti-torpedo fire

OR

Provides defensive fire to counter missiels and torpedoes

OR

Provides a field of fire to neutralize missiles and torpedoes

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Provides a field of defensive anti-missile and anti-torpedo fire
How about "Provides a defensive field of fire against missiles and torpedoes".

EDIT: Typo.

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It just builds on your suggestion. The phrase "defensive field of fire" is also a standard term.
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I was working on 'defensive field of fire'... although looking back, i realise I didn't even say that?!? I must be getting tired.
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however, it COULD be referring to it projecting a "field" of defense where ordinance is targeted and destroyed.

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'defensive field of fire'
Let us not forget that not everyone is familiar with all the nuances of the English language, and that English may not be the language they think in. I think it best to keep the number of abstract phrases down. The word 'field' can mean several things. The word turret can as well but I doubt many people are familiar with the architectural meaning, so there is less room for confusion.
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I wrote:

Provides defensive fire to counter missiels and torpedoes

Considering that, this is my preferance...

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